Can you read this short beginning to my story and rate 1-10?

It's really good. I like your writing style, but it seems to be moving just a little too fast. If the fortune is a major part of your story, then you should delay her finding it for a bit. If not, then consider not putting so much random information in your story. Every scene should have a purpose, and everything she does should be related to the story. Also, if you're writing a story about real life, and not magic or fantasy or anything, your writing style is a little too dramatic. At some parts in your story I get the feeling that Maurie's a teenager, and at other times I feel like she's in her thirties. Make her a little more consistent. And remember, I'm just saying what I think might be a problem in the long run. Your writing is really amazing. I'd read this book if it was published. Just keep on writing. :)